One day on a boat, it was a lovely day it was pouring down with rain and the boat was about to tip with all the people inside then suddenly a wave came crashing down and the boat tip on its side and then another wave came from the other direction and all the people came flying out of the boat and one maybe two landed on ice they were frozen and all the furnisher came out of the boat to 1girl was so brave she swam over to a floating desk and she was the only silver ever one was died but her her name was Emma the hero.
Hi I am a year seven student at Havelock North Intermediate. I am in room 10 and my teacher is Miss O'B.
Thursday, 9 March 2017
This is my writing
One day on a boat, it was a lovely day it was pouring down with rain and the boat was about to tip with all the people inside then suddenly a wave came crashing down and the boat tip on its side and then another wave came from the other direction and all the people came flying out of the boat and one maybe two landed on ice they were frozen and all the furnisher came out of the boat to 1girl was so brave she swam over to a floating desk and she was the only silver ever one was died but her her name was Emma the hero.
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Great story next time try proof reading;)
ReplyDeleteGreat story Brooke, what a big imagination you have! Well done 👍. Mum
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